Thursday, September 23, 2010
Blog 4
The ocean. So calming, yet so boring. I do not deny its beauty. The ability to be calm some days and so full of rage the next. But it's nothing new to me. Well that was the case up until Beowulf and his company showed up one day. A surprise it was. I was standing at the cliff, watching as I do everyday. And from the horizon a mast appears. And slowly a ship comes into sight. It moves closer and closer. I walk down to the shore to investigate the new arrival not sure of what to expect. As I make my way closer and closer to the arriving party I start to get nervous. A full company, all surrounding a very strong leader. Is this an invasion force? Will they attack? Are they friendly? Will I be able to run and warn the others or will they kill me? I get nervous. My palms begin to sweat, the shield in my right hand becomes heavier. I approach the company and I ask what their business is. The leader, or the man I assumed to be the leader, steps forward and answers. He says he wishes to see the king and that he is here to help with our latest problem: Grendel. All fear leaves my body and I am now glad. Maybe these mysterious strangers will be able to help us. As I walk them up another of the guards meets us halfway. He then begins to walk the strangers up to the king. I turn around and return back to my post. Hopefully they will succeed.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
Michael,
ReplyDeleteI really liked that. It was intriguing! Good job, you are a great writer. It was short and to the point, which is good. It was also very descriptive (I liked that too). Great job!
I like your introspective take on the inner workings of the coast-guard's mind. His thoughts have almost a poetic quality while at the same time focusing on the pragmatic problems (Will they attack? Are they friendly?) of his day-to-day existence. Since the coast-guard plays such a short part in the overall narrative, you had a lot of room to work with and definitely took full advantage of the opportunity. You're like a modern day Khalil Gibran.
ReplyDeleteMichael,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this. I think that you really got into the POV of your character, and your descriptions painted a very clear image in my mind. Good job!
ps- your blog title is really thought provoking and creative :) hahaha
ReplyDeleteMichael,
ReplyDeleteYour blog is slow, plodding, some might even say boring. Yet, this works perfectly for your blog entry. When reading, one can feel the coast guard's boredom and yet love of the ocean. The simple prose contributes to the in the moment style and one feels as if this would be an accurate representation of his inner thoughts of the character.
Nice little touches--calming, yet boring, sweaty palms, heavy shield. It works.
ReplyDelete